At first I was not sure if this story worked for me as a first person narrative, but as I read on I can see why you did so.

You did a great job with the dialogue - it really did keep the story moving. You paced it well and it was great how you showed your characters through conversation.

One thing I did pick at was this one line

Quote :

"Why the Rat?" Ruth flashed back at me which matched her red hair.

I am a little confused. What matched her red hair? Was the word meant to be flushed or did I interpret it wrong? Either way, if you could clarify this one line it should make reading a little easier. I am almost certain that it would not just be me who will pause to reread that a few times to be sure of the meaning.

Overall, a job well done.  

I see what you mean by "Why the Rat?"

It is confusing. I attempted to condense as much information
about Ruth as possible.

I used 'flashed' to indicate Ruth's quick eye movement, and
to discribe her eyes a little. Her eyes are quick and they are red. Also, 'flashed' would indicate a general fast response.

The story came from Stephen King's 'On Writing.'

He seems to laugh at writer's camps and thinks they're a wast of time. And he gives examples to support his argument.

My story pop into my head after reading his feelings about writer's camps.

I could just imagine a group of attendees sitting around and each giving an opinon such as, "I don't know...it didn't...well... you know....the kind of thing that makes...you know a good story."

I have other stories about writer's camps in my head too.

His book has given many ideas for stories!! If that was his true purpose then it worked!!!

I absolutely loved this story. It had me on the edge of my seat the whole time I was reading it. !    

good story. I enjoyed reading it and I don't think i'll be going to any writers camps.