Mr. Weikle, your short prose “Untitled” reminds me of the U.S. Colombia Space Shuttle tragedy of February, 2003 when seven astronauts were lost upon re-entry to her home atmosphere.  It is my belief that all things created ultimately bear a golden thread.  For your piece, I find that the situation / plot will produce your golden fleece in that you have used a point of view which could be interpreted as that of an alien or alien group which, looking down on earth, recorded the events that took place for the crew of the Colombia on that fateful day.  Could your crew be observers of that event?  Perhaps it could be.  You have the seed of a thought here worth developing, I believe.  Keep writing it out until it makes sense, is my best advice.  Until the golden thread shows up to you.  

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